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"isn't that awkwardly worded", then it's too awkward for DYK.) Sorry. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:28, 14 August 2016 (UTC) If the proposed hook is awkward, to whatever...

--Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:25, 22 July 2013 (UTC) The wording of the hook is awkward: "the grounds ... is the burial place". I'd suggest some rewording, perhaps...

GFDL tag are being moved to this new label to correctly note their rather awkward status. Wikipedia:GFDL standardization Commons:Template:GFDL-user-en-with-disclaimers...

entirely sure how to word it, so forgive me if the following looks a little awkward: ALT1: ... that the first Columbus Crew soccer match attended by future...

Chinese, so I'll have to assume that they're good. However, the wording is awkward, as in many places it's not normal English and indeed somewhat hard to...

Be careful that the article does not contain awkward grammar before the date and will not contain awkward grammar when the "after" text is displayed. This...

2013 (UTC). Looks good but can you reword the hook a little, it's a bit awkward.♦ Dr. ☠ Blofeld 07:49, 9 June 2013 (UTC) ALT1: ... that Sister Gargi's...

LaTeX mathematical expressions like variables, and is useful for limiting awkward wrapping points. It is more cumbersome to use for equations or other expressions...

or {{disputed inline}}. For sentences that are simply ungrammatical or awkwardly written, rather than unclear in their content, use {{copy edit inline}}...

Assassin!, QPQ is fine, but now we have the issue of hooks - ALT0 is a bit awkward, ALT1 is uninteresting, while ALT2 and 3 are not supported by the text...

(pictured) from the Essen Cathedral Treasury has been described as clumsy and awkward? Created by Furius (talk). Nominated by Gerda Arendt (talk) at 18:41, 5...

latter, but I can't really approve this as long as the wording remains awkward. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 00:25, 31 January 2019 (UTC) Copyedited article...

November 2021 (UTC) @Dumelow and Hog Farm: the main hook seems to me as awkward in structure - it make it sound like the duel was later dropped. How about...

just to remove it. In regard to the awkward wording, as far as I can see the prose is generally OK. I guess the awkward passages are the ones in which direct...

Please rephrase the hook, - a comma is missing after Alabama, but is awkward after pictured, - perhaps we don't need the exact name and location of...

And, as you mentioned, the original was a little awkward; I think my ALT is slightly less awkward, but feel free to edit it. Everything looks fine. One...

nothogenus name (the name of a hybrid between two plant genera) is slightly awkward to format: the hybrid symbol × should not be italicized, but the genus...

reference cleanup before this hits the main page. There are also a lot of awkward word choices that jump out, so I'd suggest a copyedit as well. SounderBruce...

written with quotations used for evaluations. Phrasing was confusing or awkward in places and failed to note that in concert, she specializes in oratorio;...

nothogenus name (the name of a hybrid between two plant genera) is slightly awkward to format: the hybrid symbol × should not be italicized, but the genus...

2014 (UTC) Yes, the conversions work against conciseness, and look a bit awkward. I suggest we lose them and simply use kilometres for distance and tonnes...

GFDL tag are being moved to this new label to correctly note their rather awkward status. Wikipedia:GFDL standardization Commons:Template:GFDL-user-en-with-disclaimers...

entry. Both of these tasks were previously done manually or with more awkward templates: they were tedious, involving copy/pasting, and updating the...

Thomas Eakins of his brother-in-law (pictured) was described as ugly and awkward, a critic later singled it out as "the most restrained, most classical...

"After working at Stora Teatern in Gothenburg, Rydberg started working" is awkward wording. I'll jump in to sort out some of the issues I've notice as soon...

This is a really fascinating and detailed article. I found some grammar awkwardness that should be clarified: " ... the aircraft had suffered a runaway propeller...

usage is not often encyclopedic and can usually be rewritten to avoid the awkward construction, unless part of a direct quotation. Because {{em}} is strictly...

May 2020 (UTC) I'm waiting for the check. Some of the phrasing is still awkward at least, and the edit reason attached to the copy edits contains a grammar...

Template:Did you know nominations/Terpios hoshinota Comment: This is kind of an awkward one to word, given that it's very wrapped up in Inuit conceptions of sex...

00:27, 9 June 2020 (UTC) (←) This has stalled, and the hook is somewhat awkward at the moment. @Schwede66: Would you be amenable to preparing two DYKs...

Nvvchar (talk) at 17:31, 5 January 2013 (UTC) Date, length OK. The hook is awkward, though from reviewing sources this seems to be an attempt to avoid paraphrasing...

other value), to get rid of the slight letter spacing, which can look awkward on long passages of input. Examples: {{kbd|71077345}}: "Entering 71077345...

found. QPQ done. I took the liberty of tweaking the hook to get rid of the awkward "once... three times". Good to go. --MelanieN (talk) 17:54, 11 June 2014...

about Beck. The quote should be trimmed down as it looks grammatically awkward as is. If that's done, then I say this is good to go. lullabying (talk)...

"--Epiphyllumlover (talk) 06:17, 14 January 2021 (UTC) That sounds really awkward to my ear... I did a little digging to see if there was more to work with...

"handsome buildings" and "well-proportioned" church tower sound a little awkward; at the very least they are subjective descriptions that are not supported...

core policies, including copyvio and plagiarism. I cleaned up a couple of awkward phrases in the article text. Cbl62 (talk) 14:59, 13 August 2013 (UTC)...

linkage is all-too-common. Plus ALT1 has the advantage of not using that awkward "s's" construction that Wikipedia insists upon. I made a couple of really...

obvious plagiarism. Prefer ALT1 hook with the piped link, rather than the awkward "standard hyphenated title naming style" link. Seems to be only his/her...

must add that part, how about "and one of the two total"? "Then" sounds awkward and out of place. Bejinhan talks 00:26, 9 June 2019 (UTC) That works too...

are fine. Image is in the public domain. Hook is intriguing but a bit awkward. How about: ALT2: ... that Caractacus (pictured), winner of the 1862 Epsom...

the hook. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:09, 25 January 2013 (UTC) This is a bit awkward, but I'm wondering whether QPQ credit should be given for the second review...

interesting. Hook wording is awkward but I really can't think of an alternative that would neatly work either. Imo it's awkward but not incorrect, so fine...

commissions and the history (skipped from 1951 straight to 2018, so it is a bit awkward). Here's a bit from Kompas (it seems that they experienced a lot of problems...

know nominations/KXIC Comment: I'm ok with rewording the hook if it's too awkward. Please let me know. Created by Ganbaruby (talk). Self-nominated at 07:38...

Fame in 1994" is reused but probably unavoidable without rewording in an awkward way; hook is interesting to me, mentioned in the article and checks out...

though my attempts to come up with one throughout the day only generated an awkward result: ...that the last verse of the Rush song "Freewill" was the last...

entry. Both of these tasks were previously done manually or with more awkward templates: they were tedious, involving copy/pasting, and updating the...

hook and its citation are fine, but the bit about the different name is awkward. May I suggest something like, "... that Stangl Pottery, under its earlier...

21:19, 2 August 2015 (UTC). Needs a better hook. It sounds a bit bagje awkward for the ears. Shhhhwwww!! (talk) 22:09, 6 August 2015 (UTC) Hmm? I thought...

where no other is given, but this is not really an issue. The hook has an awkward sequence, and could be taken as saying the two co-authored both books....

who don’t normally play games." ([1]) ALT1:... that Florence shows the awkwardness of a first date through a puzzle minigame, which becomes easier as the...

interesting enough), and short enough. The wording, however, was a bit awkward, so I've taken the liberty of adjusting it. Hook (and rest of article)...

full agenda were kept a complete secret. However, the wording was a bit awkward, so I've edited it to make it more clear. Thank you! Every thing is OK...

update. Take care that neither the "before" nor "after" text displays with awkward grammar. Unless the hour= is set, statements will be switched on the date...

April 1905? Whatever you guys think would make the sentence the least awkward. EricEnfermero | Howdy! 20:26, 1 July 2012 (UTC) The alt is much better...

"may" being key. The wording of the 2nd half of the hook does seem a bit awkward to me. Although I don't think it is essential, it might be worth considering...

italics for the book followed by the italics for the drawing note is a bit awkward, and the second of course is an active sentence. Next DYK volunteer, take...

for pity's sake, please rewrite the source sentence to something less awkward. Try something like, "Aviation giant British Airways' dominance of the...

6 February 2014 (UTC) The hook with "showing Ruby/shows Ruby's" looks awkward to me. ALT1: ... that Ruby Loftus Screwing a Breech Ring (pictured) shows...

done. The image licence is fine (although "detail pictured" sounds a bit awkward, like it was a detail of Mercier-Ythier we're looking at). This is good...

Yoninah (talk) 19:39, 18 May 2014 (UTC) Done, plus some rewriting of awkward and grammatically incorrect sentences.--¿3family6 contribs 21:19, 18 May...

sauropod dinosaurs? Reviewed: Red Moor Comment: Hook wording is a bit awkward. Feel free to tweak. Created/expanded by Obsidian Soul (talk). Self nom...

Moswento talky 16:37, 6 May 2012 (UTC) I did kinda have that come out more awkward than it should have. How does it look now? - The Bushranger One ping only...

Yoninah (talk) 22:47, 8 February 2012 (UTC) The original hook is a little awkward now that I look at it. ALT1 is fine. :) - The Bushranger One ping only...

be honest in saying that "there were 24 head coaches in total" sounds awkward to me. My only idea that I could think of to word that better is a sentence...

music video for Tove Lo's song "Bikini Porn"? Source: Tove Lo Takes An Awkward Uber Ride With Finneas In 'Bikini Porn' Video ALT1:... that musician Finneas...

non-igneous processes? And drop the picture which makes the wording very awkward while adding no real value. -Arb. (talk) 13:07, 5 January 2013 (UTC) Date...

16:38, 16 April 2019 (UTC) Approving a modified version of ALT1. The others have awkward wording and pacing. SounderBruce 21:20, 23 April 2019 (UTC)...

source why the number sixty was chosen. Secondly, the wording is a bit awkward. I'd like to wait another day for comments from BrownHairedGirl as the...

I've made some copyedits, but nothing major. I would suggest changing the awkward "Russian Empire army" in the hook to something like "Imperial Russian army"...

only two days left to live." Reviewed: Neri Oxman Comment: I'm finding it awkward to place all of this information in a single sentence within the article...

re-reading this, while I still prefer ALT1, I think the wording's a bit awkward. Specifically, the quote followed by the word "about" followed by the subject...

interesting and seems well sourced, but some of the language is a bit awkward, There's mention made of an arrest for the murders of Saunders, but no...

article has also been blocked for copyright, which made things a little awkward. Thanks for the review, Matty.007 16:45, 8 September 2013 (UTC) For being...

Ruby comment! 01:51, 10 September 2011 (UTC) I like ALT 1 - "its head" in ALT 2 is a bit awkward. Truthkeeper (talk) 01:57, 10 September 2011 (UTC)...

ref. ComputerJA (☎ • ✎) 14:24, 10 October 2013 (UTC) Sorry about this awkward miss. I have fixed it now.--Nvvchar. 14:42, 10 October 2013 (UTC) It's...

international audience who has never heard of these actors. It's also awkward that you seem to be quoting her, when in fact you're quoting a review....

of Andeli is located in present-day Upper Normandy..." There are other awkward phrases in the article. Without intent to insult, I feel it is a shame...

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Secretlondon (talk) 23:53, 6 June 2012 (UTC) Did some copyediting on the awkward phrasing, how is it now? - The Bushranger One ping only 01:15, 7 June 2012...

Be careful that the article does not contain awkward grammar before the date and will not contain awkward grammar when the "after" text is displayed. This...

necessity (it's merely important that the content is verifiable), it seems awkward to read that some statements have sources but others don't. Since sources...

al; QPQs have been carried out. The wording of the hook feels a little awkward to me, but I couldn't think of a better way to word it (except perhaps...

reviewer who promoted this article. I reworded the hook to be a little less awkward. Daniel Case (talk) 19:09, 7 January 2015 (UTC) Carlojoseph14 I have added...

(talk). Self nominated at 07:28, 11 June 2013 (UTC). Confusing, Hook is awkward, I'd changed it to: ALT1: ... that Balu Mahendra made Neengal Kettavai...

TM:TDYK Article history ) ... that according to The Guardian, Ed Miliband's awkward eating of a bacon sandwich could have been because it was a bread roll...

QPQ done, I'm assuming no copyvio issues. However, the hook is a little awkward. Do you have another way to phrase it, such as "ALT0a: ... that Ayushmann...

say that, but I thought I'd just try. OK, so how about we try to get the awkward sentence to run more smoothly? Anyone like to have a go? This is a lovely...

inadequate hook or an awkward sentence wedged into the body of the text. Who said that "the hook would be inadequate or an awkward sentence should be wedged...

Mach 2? Rlendog (talk) 18:12, 6 December 2011 (UTC) That looks a little awkward, perhaps ALT2 ... that an airliner version of the B-58 bomber was expected...

DYK. However, it does read a bit clunkily, and I've removed some of the awkward punctuation. Otherwise, nice work! epicgenius (talk) 02:27, 2 August 2017...

William Etty (pictured) was described as "Slovenly in attire, short and awkward in body" and "'one of the oddest looking creatures' in a Young Lady's eyes"...

copyplagaphrasing, images is good at DYK size though the crop is a bit awkward and there is a tag on it saying it might be rights restricted, so probably...

muckrackers"? theleekycauldron I think that seems too long and sounds awkward. That also goes if I'm reading it correctly with the mistakes. SL93 (talk)...

plural and the article sometimes says "the state game lands...". It'd be awkward to say "the state game lands is", so I've decided to go with "are". I've...

updated both articles as such to reflect that. However the hook would be awkward, I can't mention "reunited in 2013" because both Amore and Cassady were...

Comment: Still in the middle of expansion, very long article. Wording is awkward so please feel free to reword Created/expanded by Obsidian Soul (talk)...

to Disney's response to Florida's ..."? Though "reaction to response" awkward - is there an even better suggestion? "Disney's support for"? Though the...

or article. No QPQ needed. I find the wording of the hook to be rather awkward (also "aquatic store" is erroneously written in singular instead of plural)...

"short form" wasn't used in that fashion, which made it look somewhat awkward to my eye. I wouldn't object though if the promoter sticks in the NASCAR...

(UTC) I prefer the following, which is shorter and, I think, slightly less awkward: ALT1: ... that the Body of Proof episode "Dead Man Walking" guest starred...

neutral & w/o policy violations. Issues: (a) Hook length is 177 chars, but awkwardly phrased and is a problem as it appears to be a concatenation of two sources...

checks check out. I did add commas to the hook though since it was an awkward run-on, but otherwise I do not see a reason to change it at this time....

Self-nominated at 20:53, 14 May 2020 (UTC). "World's Tallest Politician" looks awkward (why the need for caps?) Otherwise the article is new and long enough,...

29 November 2018 (UTC) Thanks. I have added "the" to the hook because it seemed gramatically awkward. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:40, 29 November 2018 (UTC)...

2016 (UTC). Looks good. I've made some copy edits to take care of some awkward phrasing and to improve readability. I've also taken the italics out of...

this section. Thanks, Matty.007 12:20, 28 October 2013 (UTC) Sorry to be awkward, but it would be acceptable if the sentence at the start of that table...

changed to avoid copy edit issues. Something about the ALT1 grammar seems awkward. You were right in that the original phrase order would be the most grammatically...

currently has "(pictured)" immediately following a possessive, which makes for awkward reading. Would it be okay if I tweaked it to read: "... that all three...

era as nearly sacrosanct, procedure of liberum veto." This sentence is awkward and could be rewritten. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 07:33, 9 December 2011 (UTC)...

the " (50 kg)" at the end, and that part didn't have a ref. It looked awkward both that way and the way I had it in the hook, so I've changed it; now...

Be careful that the article does not contain awkward grammar before the date and will not contain awkward grammar when the "after" text is displayed. This...

@Britishfinance: Good point re: band name, but I find the wording of ALT1 a bit awkward; how about ALT2, below? Vanamonde (Talk) 01:13, 21 March 2020 (UTC) ALT2...

DaltonCastle (talk) 00:38, 19 December 2016 (UTC) Removed quotes and awkward wording that seemed advertish. Hopefully good to go! Morganfitzp (talk)...

study of chemistry -- all at once. Even leaving something out it's pretty awkward, but here's a thought: ALT2 ... that Pope John XXII's decretal Spondent...

complete. Everything looks cited. ALT0 I don't like so much because of the awkward repetition of "along" but ALT1 is good. Ashorocetus (talk | contribs) 23:24...

(talk). Self-nominated at 00:49, 16 May 2021 (UTC). the hook reads a little awkward to me at the moment ("in respect to"? And I'd straight up say what the...

GFDL tag are being moved to this new label to correctly note their rather awkward status. Wikipedia:GFDL standardization Commons:Template:GFDL-user-en-with-disclaimers...

Ontario-based" correct? It looks odd. In addition, the "!?" at the end is kind of awkward, maybe the exclamation mark should be taken out? Although technically it...

eligibility: Cited: Interesting: Other problems: - "and a group" is a little awkward to me. I suggest ALT1: ...that in 1984, Bob Hobman began a journey to sail...

cleanup issues that can easily be fixed, grammar and sentence structure are awkward or wrong in a few places I strongly prefer the second hook over the other...

(talk) 00:09, 25 December 2011 (UTC) Hmm, I think that might be synthesis, awkward, or both. How about: ALT1: "... that because of competition from Costa...

Tournament Founder & Fashion Designer, Dies Aged 79" as to not include the awkward bare-reference fill-in. All the best. Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:04, 26 September...

preferred action to pretty words. Those family reunions must have been awkward with him marrying her sister. Froggerlaura (talk) 15:14, 20 January 2012...

entry. Both of these tasks were previously done manually or with more awkward templates: they were tedious, involving copy/pasting, and updating the...

2012 (UTC) Crisco, I'd change that hook: "only pop song often used" is awkward--consider changing "often" to "regularly". Drmies (talk) 02:22, 25 July...

margin. ;-) -- Ohc ¡digame! 01:46, 16 January 2014 (UTC) Oh, well this is awkward. I just shortened the hooks to the best ability I can. ZappaOMati 02:10...

order (1, 3, 4), you may as well say that. "and/or" is always somewhat awkward, maybe thing about rephrasing. --Usernameunique (talk) 06:35, 21 August...

the bit about the minister resigning because it was making the sentence awkward. Since the picture is apparently free, I added it. Daniel Case (talk) 01:38...

guy was neighbors and friends with people whom he fought against; how awkward was it, then, that he came right back to the U.S. and served as a representative...

(for clarity) and piped the healing of the nobleman's son. It's a bit awkward there because the books of the Bible are wikilinked and then the citations...

suffers from awkward wording in English as well. The hooks for this DYK suffers from similar issues; all hooks are worded awkwardly. It's awkward in English...

@Schwede66: Hi, I came by to promote this but the hook wording is very awkward (combines the for New Zealand?) Could you rephrase it? Perhaps: ALT1: ...

.from the time' as smoother language. 'was raised...since' just feels awkward. valereee (talk) 13:08, 30 August 2015 (UTC) You're completely right. She's...

name outside the Twin Cities route. I agree that the phrasing is a bit awkward and I'll try to come up with something better. Mackensen (talk) 18:55,...

content is consistent with what shows up in online sources. There is some awkward wording like "originally born in New Zealand". I would copy edit it, but...

No useful English word for 'Abendlieder' and 'evening-songs' is I think awkward in English - how about just leaving this out? ('recorded love songs......

of Nepal's 2020 tourism advertising campaign is a Yeti?   (To avoid the awkward "Nepal's ... campaign's". MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 21:21, 3 June 2020 (UTC))...

article a bit, I think a little more work can be done to remove some of the awkward wording. For instance, there are many cases of people being referenced...

enough: Long enough: Other problems: - The personal life section is very awkward, and could use clarity that Jamie Foxx's birth name is Eric Marlon Bishop...

content are satisfactory. I would go for ALT1 as the original hook is a bit awkward, including as it does, 2 apostrophes. The hook reference is not available...

page by Godley, this reference is fine in my opinion and it would look awkward to cite it two times immediately after each other. De728631 (talk) 14:01...

char is under maximum and verified in the cited source, but wording is awkward. Clearly 2015 is after 1996 and would be impossible before. Possibly "last...

nomination to be eligible. I struck "erstwhile" from the hook, as it is a bit awkward within the prose. Kevin Rutherford (talk) 04:20, 11 September 2012 (UTC)...

QPQ and the lede has been addressed. I think the new hook reads a bit awkward, since it makes it think you're talking about springs as in the source...

readable. I would suggest on more copyedit before prime time, there are some awkward phrasings such as "Upanishads attached the Atharvaveda," or "In contrast...

off-line sourcing that can't be verified by a reviewer. Also, the hook is awkward. Venice is not currently an "area", it's an unincorporated community. It...

comparison to Anne Frank in the hook, somehow the phrasing/word choice seems awkward. Unfortunately can't seem to come up with an ALT at this time. Any suggestions...

(UTC) Hi, I came by to promote this, and did some editing to remove the awkward phrasing and just quote the source directly. More needs to be done in the...

February 2013 (UTC) Quibble: "attempt of ... Buller ... of entering" seems awkward. I propose ALT1 below: Aymatth2 (talk) 01:40, 21 February 2013 (UTC) ....

10:32, 16 November 2013 (UTC) Yes, you are totally correct. That's kind of awkward that I misinterpreted the sources. Thank you for pointing it out. And good...

America and Europe. SL93 (talk) 04:16, 22 June 2020 (UTC) It's rather awkward to say a dead person is making her film debut. Yoninah (talk) 12:37, 22...

I'm fine with the current hook, but "serving mostly cinema" is a little awkward - maybe rephrase it. The fire and its building on the site of a bombed...

more context in the hook, and possibly use a living example to avoid the awkward use of "was". How about: ALT2: ... that Akshata Murty, wife of British...

self-nomination, so QPQ is not required. The hook is sourced but it is a bit awkward, containing two issues. I would prefer a hook like ALT1 below, but I could...

might be a good idea to switch the two phrases since that wording seems awkward. And I think it might also be a good idea to link to Indian rupee at the...

out of the ordinary). QPQ done. Hooks are all fine and cited (if a bit awkward with the date reference, but what can you do?). Not a DYK concern, but...

literal translation of a source when a colloquialism renders the phrase awkward in English. And then the link to golden wedding in the hook complicates...

Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:07, 7 February 2019 (UTC) It's a bit awkward regarding the main hook, because the source quotes Lee Sartor relaying...

fish and chip shop in the country"?' I feel that the wording is a bit awkward so I welcome any changes. Panamitsu ✨ 06:43, 8 February 2026 (UTC) I see...

first take. Also, find a way to rephrase the hook. The phrasing is a bit awkward with the word "first" appearing three times and "take" twice. QPQ still...

need a copyedit by someone familiar with word order. I propose a less awkward sounding hook: Graeme Bartlett (talk) 12:40, 13 May 2012 (UTC) Repaired...

not required for DYK, the sentence fragment "at depths down to" sounds awkward to me; perhaps it can be replaced with "to depths of" or some such? The...

Coastal hurricane? Reviewed: Neomysis integer Comment: Hook wording might be awkward (attempting to imply it's an estimate), up to reviewer's discretion. Moved...

don't tend to bother with shorter articles (in some instances it seems awkward to me to have almost as many reference sections as article text sections)...

was called the Munni vs Sheila debate? Comment: I know it seems a bit awkward to give only one article the prominence, but I don't think I can help it...

clearer and so I am approving it and striking alt 1 which I find to be a bit awkward and confusing as to what replaced what. QPQ completed. Image paired with...

suggest a slight rewording as the dangling despite being a cat sounds a bit awkward: ALT2: ... that when the cat Buurtpoes Bledder (pictured) died, his death...

disputes that he was one, but the juxtaposition with "writer" might seem awkward or undue so one might as well do away with both. Also I believe "satire...

copyrightvio. While the article in generally good, some of the English is awkward, for example: moved probably then from, according to legend, with errant...

you for reviewing. I removed the paragraph because I felt like it was awkward in the article, repeating much of the paragraph before it. It had a reputable...

does that look to you @BU Rob13:--Kevmin § @Kevmin: That reword is a bit awkward. I would go with something of the form "After examining both specimens...

Sorga Palsoe. Javier Espinoza (talk) 22:23, 11 June 2013 (UTC) A little awkward, back to front,I'm guessing you're a native Spanish speaker? Try ALT1 "that...

it look now (I do think this edit made the wording in the article less awkward)? = paul2520 💬 18:25, 18 July 2022 (UTC) Approving ALT0 but not ALT1 for...

introduction, then a "history" or "description" section. It looks extremely awkward with a table of contents at the bottom. I'm happy to review the hook with...

trying to avoid being too repetitive but I guess it came off a little awkward. Daß Wölf 17:05, 15 December 2019 (UTC) Can I get another reviewer to look...

browsers. Wraps the entire construction in the {{Nowrap}} template to prevent awkward line-breaking between the "+" and the name that follows it (because browsers...

February 2016 (UTC) Yes, this is so much better. "Historically" did feel awkward. Thanks, Damibaru (talk) 22:18, 25 February 2016 (UTC) PROMOTED with ALT2...

I'd reword the last sentence in the "Ecology" section; it's somewhat awkward, and seems to have an extra noun at the end (corals, species). --Usernameunique...

are jailed, not so specific for him. I also think that the hook reads awkward: you start reading and think it's about a party, only later you are told...

though it could do with copyediting to remove minor grammatical errors and awkward constructions. The hook is properly referenced. However, at 236 characters...

copyright violation issues. Hooks: the suggested hook sounds slightly awkward. What about "was withdrawn from circulation because of its use in money...

characters Content: ? - "1996 Atlanta Olympics" and "2000 Olympics" seems awkward to me. Perhaps I can suggest an ALT1, let me know how you feel about it...

it can act as a vector for plant viruses", with disease feeling a bit awkward there. Also is it possible to get an additional reference for the scarcity...

the society's article needs copyediting because there are a couple of awkward passages. I'd rather not touch it - I don't want to inadvertedly change...

District after shopping at a fruit and vegetable market", which is a tiny bit awkward and sort-of implies the bomb was shopping. Could you maybe reword it? Yeshivish613...

Moved one out but kept the other which I feel is merited and would be awkward to shove in prose the way it's configured. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c)...

for the purpose of explaining the language patterns (which is otherwise awkward when using rōmaji, since rōmaji is unable to discriminate kana). The optional...

their credit. Article says: "Jakarta Globe wrote that the film presents awkward visuals, including the retro 1970s wardrobe and the kitschy kung-fu imagery...

2018 (UTC) Let's get this show on the road. ALT1 is verified. It's a bit awkward and wordy but I'll let it go as proposed. Hook is verified, and under 200...

sure if that's OK or not. Otherwise it would be fine. The ALT feels a bit awkward, but could be rephrased to work better. For example: ALT2 - ... that Body...

Schütz, and a clause such as "possibly pictured but rather not" seems awkward. Better no image, or a crop, or this which shows the style of the period...

the article still needs work. There are numerous fragmented sentences, awkward wordings and malapropisms (eg in the lead, "it has been refurnished" -...

written by a non-native speaker on English as it has a lot of strange\awkward phrasing. As such, it could really use a good copyedit. --ThaddeusB (talk)...

not evident. Fully referenced. I will say that original hook is a bit awkward and redundant sounding. But alt1 sounds fine and is short enough. It is...

in. "The 2020 New York's 22nd congressional district election" sounds awkward to me: how much am I allowed to tweak the article name? Created by Apocheir...

unfamiliar with Wieland that it would mean his time. "Contemporary" is awkward, how about dropping "modern" - as it can be any time? ALT4: ... that Christoph...

tick this as good to go. The wording of the hooks still seems somewhat awkward but I don't want to steal your thunder by re-writing them The hooks usually...

Assassin! «T ♦ C ♦ G» 09:49, 6 May 2014 (UTC) Wording of the hook seems a bit awkward, "auctioned its first 3G and 4G spectrum auction"—how about "held its first...

to check the translation of the article, as some phrases sound really awkward (the singer Jubin Nautiyal was there at the sitting who "instantly loved...

character limit (advice is welcome) 'Chromosomes pictured' is, I think, an awkward wording, but the formal term ('karyotype') is definitely going to be unclear...

Nonsensical Babble ☯ 10:10, 19 July 2013 (UTC) Better, but the wording is a bit awkward: it implies that the victim was the one who caused the depositing to happen...

I think the hook reads a bit off - the qualifier on the qualifier is awkward though not wrong. But the "nearly after two years of its initial release"...

wasn't quite sure how to put all that in without it sounding slightly awkward (at least to my Mountain Dew-fueled brain), so I reworded it a bit in an...

on the Main Page. Overall: Nice work. I prefer ALT1, as the grammar of ALT0 feels somewhat awkward to me. Epicgenius (talk) 14:51, 7 August 2023 (UTC)...

(UTC) If you want to go with Alt 1, then I think its wording is a little awkward, and needs tidying up; the content of Alt 1 is fine. If you prefer Alt...

Hamill 2002, p. 62. ALT1:... that the United States found it "intolerably awkward ... to turn a blind eye to vigilante murder" during the Northern Ireland...

but just append new ones). We are limited to 200 chars so it is a bit awkward to fit so much into one line, but I am open to suggestions. Thanks! Footlessmouse...

might need to be rephrased somewhat as I find the wording to be a little awkward. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 08:21, 13 January 2019 (UTC) I guess the irony...

themselves, against the wishes of the owners of the leagues' teams? The awkward is admittedly a bit clunky but I hope you get the idea. Narutolovehinata5...

Harrias talk 15:58, 18 September 2015 (UTC) RE: ALT3 and ALT4: It sounds awkward to say "DYK ...that ABC more than anyone other than XYZ". Better would...

one at WP:GOCE), and the phrase "national attributes" is unidiomatic and awkward (we would say "national symbols"). I'd like to see this copyedited before...

sources. -- Ohc ¡digame! 08:53, 21 January 2014 (UTC) Also the hook seems awkward to me. Suggest slightly rearranging it: ALT1: ... that Charles Wilson (pictured)...

However the hook is kind of unclear; the "during September" statement is awkward. I suggest: ... that Hurricane Debbie in 1961 was one of the most powerful...

Cited: Interesting: Other problems: Overall: The article's text sounds awkward to me, and SounderBruce tagged it as needing to be rewritten. I do think...

I said, mostly related to names, so hard to completely eliminate) and awkward grammar on one section, which looked like a product of not enough proofreading...

Thomas L. Martin Building, known as the "MARB," after him. It sounds a bit awkward as is, could you rephrase? The first proposed hook is good, and I'll AGF...

OK in length, qpq done, within policy. The hook is a bit grammatically awkward, the verb "set" appears to go to "with four trombones..." which puts a...

other species of fungus, which makes putting the termite first in the hook awkward. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:50, 16 October 2020 (UTC) Cwmhiraeth Thanks very...

(UTC) Thanks for adding the sources. "The most awarded" in the hook sounds awkward to me, maybe "more than any other film"? -Zanhe (talk) 19:57, 4 December...

Overall: Good article. The phrase "presented at 43 stories" reads a little awkward to me. Great photos here. If we're using the photos with the hook, we'll...

article as well. Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 14:44, 2 May 2016 (UTC) @Yoninah: Awkward wording on my part. I've made the change to the article and the hook. –...

expanded to qualify for DYK. Just as a note, the wording in the lead is a bit awkward with the parentheticals referring to the infobox map, but that is not a...

talented enough to figure out how to do this without making an awfully awkward mess of the hooks. 78.26 (spin me / revolutions) 15:14, 14 September 2018...

Art Museum". The New York Times. December 15, 1959 ALT1: ... that the "awkward, cramped galleries" at 2 Columbus Circle later housed New York City government...

(talk) 15:40, 1 July 2021 (UTC) Came to promote. Gerda Arendt the alt is awkward -- getting up is the problem, I think. Any objection to tweaking the alt...

useful. And you can't select a start time at the audio, it's a bit of an awkward embed I think. I can try listen again and map the various points, but you'd...

would contain explosives? "presenting in front of him a fake present" is awkward and not very idiomatic: "placing a present containing explosives in front...

named by Oscar Ling Cartwright after his brother" made it sound really awkward so I've struck the final three words, but that shouldn't be an issue. Umimmak...

output of {{make cite IUCN}} (wikilinks etc) before saving. One, sort of awkward, way to accomplish that is to open another browser window and open a sandbox...

well-cited. The hook could be a little wordy, but it may need to be somewhat awkward to convey everything, so it is fine. QPQ done. Hameltion (talk, contribs)...

article also probably needs a copyedit: I can see some typo errors and awkwardly-constructed phrases in the article, such as In 2019, Shah is currently...

some paragraph break. Right now it looks a little jumbled with several awkward sentences. Also, while WP:LEAD states that not everything in the section...

you think about this? Having a hook with both 1931 and 2009 seems a bit awkward to me and I think it dilutes the interesting-ness. ―Panamitsu (talk) 00:30...

to be fixed. The first sentence in the "Redevelopment" section is quite awkward and ungrammatical (there may be a word missing and/or a couple extra words)...

suitably licensed for front page. QPQ done. Hook wording seems a little awkward, so I've propsed an ALT1 that might be a bit better, although I'm not entirely...

Translation I'll accept. @Cathodography: Not a DYK issue but there's still some awkward wording to clean up and one untranslated phrase in the Personnel section...

13:42, 22 October 2018 (UTC) You're right, the hooks do sound a little awkward. I've added some interesting information about the bird's voice. How about...

(talk) 08:25, 20 December 2017 (UTC) @BlueMoonset: ...well, that's a little awkward; I was unaware of that as I don't think I've submitted a spinout before...

successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page. Hook seemed a little awkward to me, so I added ALT0a. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 16:27, 11 November 2023 (UTC)...

Length, age and neutrality are OK. Checking the sources now. The hook is awkward as it shoehorns in the article title and would require an imperial conversion...

(talk) 18:15, 19 September 2021 (UTC) Looking at the hooks, ALT0 is a bit awkward sounding to me, but ALT1 is interesting, short, and effective. — Preceding...

Eisenach, shortly before the Fall of the Wall? ("about taking new ways confidently" seems awkwardly placed) GeneralPoxter (talk) 20:43, 28 March 2021 (UTC)...

today with this diff. The quote uses the word "festivity", which is rather awkward and old-fashioned to use in the hook IMO. I've gone with "festival", as...

interesting and verified. ALT1 is OK too, but the main problem is syntax – it is awkward and also a mouthful – and I'm not sure how to fix it (though someone else...

stating that he rose from teaboy to CEO in the same company, but it is awkward here with the various takeovers that occurred along the way. I think he...

(UTC) I've done some additional copyediting; the prose is still a bit awkward in places, but I think it's passable now. I don't think the hook should...

or {{disputed inline}}. For sentences that are simply ungrammatical or awkwardly written, rather than unclear in their content, use {{copy edit inline}}...

the law is Landlord and Tenant (Ireland) Act 1870, but that makes very awkward wording for a DYK. Can a descriptive term be employed in the hook instead...

which I fixed. I did a little additional cleanup, as the prose is rather awkward at parts, but this is a DYK, not an FA, and they were minor issues. There's...

link to. (3) The phrase "died before finishing to check of" is a little awkward; maybe "died before completing his review of" or something like that would...

cited and content within policy. However, the article formatting is a bit awkward, it doesn't read very well, there's a prominent red link in the middle...

for some weird link piping issues; even now piping the link as "people in Japan have used cannabis" feels a bit awkward. 21:46, 13 December 2021 (UTC)...

the two. "Over its century plus of business...formerly offered" seems awkward...why does it matter that it was a century of business? Maybe something...

and re-read the article to discover my error. However, there are some awkward statements that need to be corrected and the hook needs to appear in the...

18 January 2025 (UTC). Overall: Photo's fine, but a bit lackluster and awkward cuz she's visibly in the middle of saying something. I'd chop the hook...

enough, and within policy. The hook fact is verifiable but the wording is awkward. In particular, setting "words as an opera", is a weird turn of phrase...

eligibility: Cited: Interesting: Other problems: - The original hook is awkwardly worded. A have reworded it as ALT1 in clearer English Overall: Good to...

25 May 2024 (UTC) New to DYK. Article looks fine but the hook is a bit awkward - maybe try ...that "NewJeansNim," a DJ[ing] monk, was credited with reviving...

disappearance? the "author's [author's name]'s disappearance" is a bit awkward, this might be better: ALT2 ... that Wounds of Armenia, the first Armenian...

close to his interests. - In the article, I find a few sentences a bit awkward. Example: "married the ethnomusicologist Laura Boulton (then known as Laura...

can't find a better way to phrase it, but the repetition of "during" is awkward here. Also, it's worth noting that until fairly recently, most fatalities...

direct quote instead of paraphrasing since the two "one's" are slightly awkward, what do you think? Below some image suggestions. Mujinga (talk) 18:17...

Joe Chill (talk) 14:49, 25 August 2011 (UTC) I still think it's a little awkward, but my concerns have been adequately addressed. cmadler (talk) 02:46,...

okay, as unless one is fluent in German (as are you), it doesn't seem awkward. --Usernameunique (talk) 21:18, 21 March 2018 (UTC) Fine. --Gerda Arendt...

forgot to watchlist so I hadn't seen the replies. Some of the writing is awkward and I think this needs a copyedit. There are phrases like On of his opponent...

Alt0 but none of the other hooks are appealing to me (ie boring or have awkward wording). Alt0 checks out to the cited source. Let's go with that one.4meter4...

December 2013 (UTC) It just strikes me as a little... breathless? I find it awkward, but if others think it's OK... Thanks, Matty.007 17:35, 24 December 2013...

but I do find the wording "was doubled from the one a year prior" a bit awkward. Srnec (talk) The hook fact appears to be absent from main body text. Gatoclass...

in this case you're right, an infobox makes the coat of arms look less awkward. Added. Thanks again Gerda! Yakikaki (talk) 19:49, 7 November 2024 (UTC)...

hook as per the consensus above, and because "atmosphere from" sounds awkward anyway. Re article: No problems with disambig links or with access to external...

needs some copy-editing here and there, as some of the sentences feel awkwardly worded or are run-on. The citations should also use the actual site names...

December 2016 (UTC) @Gerda Arendt: In my opinion, your hook is a little awkwardly worded and I wonder if it might be shortened, to something like: (ALT1):...

14:30, 12 August 2018 (UTC) @Dahn: Choose one or the other. It sounds awkward with both removed and replaced. SounderBruce 07:45, 13 August 2018 (UTC)...

me, regardless of whether it can be properly referenced. It reads a bit awkward because the word "city" is there twice; and the wording "was used" sounds...

BlueMoonset (talk) 20:56, 2 December 2013 (UTC) The alt hook looks a bit awkward to me. Suggested alt: ALT2: ... that artist James Le Jeune is said to have...

adding a parenthetical that makes it too lengthy, or making the sentence awkward. The best I've thought of so far is inserting "...is a database that.....

should somehow indicate that, but I don't see how to do that in a not-awkward way so let's just leave it. EEng (talk) 16:49, 5 June 2015 (UTC) @EEng:...

well-sourced. No issues with DYK eligibility. However, the hook is a little awkward and long; suggest alternative: Alt: ... that Johannes Brahms twice composed...

Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 22:51, 22 April 2022 (UTC) Hook is awkward and needs to be rewritten. AGF on the sources. New enough, long enough...

of the legislative department." The phrase "most valuable service" is awkward. "Her knowledge of law enabled her to direct wisely all the movement for...

since the nominator's first language is Turkish, some of the phrasing is awkward (e.g., "Soon, he ended his player career and preferred to pursue a coaching...

$72-$95 million is a lot, but the fact that it's a range makes it a bit awkward. {{u|Sdkb}} talk 19:18, 28 June 2021 (UTC) The changes all look good, Sdkb...

MichaelQSchmidt (talk). Self nom at 03:57, 1 June 2012 (UTC) The wording is awkward, "created the mini-film creating", too much creating in 6 words. Maybe...

(talk) 12:01, 10 July 2025 (UTC) I think the article would look pretty awkward without a lead. Currently the body is 1450 characters and the lead 350...

enough, long enough, prose is good (a sentence in the bio is a tad long and awkward), no copyright violations on text. One thing: I'm not sure of the copyright...

ceiling or not, and phrase and cite the thing appropriately. [ALT1 is so awkward that it's kind of a non-starter.] Also, per Google Book searches for...

Secondary College has a camp with colonies of Platypuses and Wombats? A bit awkward, perhaps. Creation date, length and cite are fine. Acroterion (talk) 13:26...

an employee of Jaeger, not an employer of him) and boring, and ALT1 is awkwardly worded with many qualifiers. So my preference would be to go with ALT2...

changes it to active voice and "for the first time observed" is kind of awkward phrasing. Also, the article lead says it was the first explosive eruption...

pronoun is now widely accepted as a neutral alternative, and better than the awkward 'he or she' construction because it also includes genderqueer and non-binary...

tone etc. fine. Well sourced, including the hook, but the hook is a bit awkward. I suggest using ALT1 below instead. Aymatth2 (talk) 13:23, 12 May 2012...

I found no evidence of close paraphrasing. I thought the hook a bit awkwardly expressed, mentioning as it does "snapping a string". What about:- ALT1...

May 1966, Electrada renamed itself Sargent Industries." - this sounds awkward. Why not say something like "the company's name was changed to" or "so...

sources. -- Daniel Mietchen - WiR/OS (talk) 00:57, 12 August 2012 (UTC) Awkward grammar. How about ALT1 ... that the oblong rocksnail (pictured), which...

end, using a different form of her name, and changing "or" to the more awkward "and/or". Even the ordering of the museums is the same. All material on...

suggest the article be copyedited a little because the grammar is a bit awkward in some places, such as in the Production and Reception sections. Narutolovehinata5...

review). The hook: I like the hook, and the but "was" sounds a little awkward. Would recommend just adding the year or another way to make the time clearer...

changes. Flibirigit (talk) 16:13, 31 July 2020 (UTC) Well... this is really awkward, but it appears myself and others failed to notice that this article has...

(UTC) They all look good to me. Revised ALT3 for grammar; it's a touch awkward with two consecutive possessives, but what can you do? Sammi Brie (she/her...

2020 (UTC) Yoninah, Yeah, I know. The problem is, the alternatives are so awkward, this really seems like the best way to say it, even if it's not strictly...

the article and verified in the source. I think the wording is a little awkward, and am proposing a slight change: ALT1a:... that the famous harpist Mildred...

Koranic and an elementary school" isn't entirely clear, likely due to awkward wording. Also, the article confusingly indicates that "Mimar" is simply...

March 2016 (UTC) Unfortunately, it's not good enough. Many instances of awkward phrasing still exist, and in some cases I'm not even sure what you are...

all: most of it is a quote, the brackets need fixing, and the phrasing is awkward. Can't we come up with something better? Drmies (talk) 01:45, 27 July 2014...

AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 16:20, 3 September 2025 (UTC) The article would look very awkward if you removed the lead. Even if you reduced the lead to "Laurent Saint-Cyr...

although part of the title of the article under review for DYK, seems awkward here. The bibliography, it seems to me, is the list of Neal's works, whereas...

out. I recommend shortening the section title "Taxonomy summary" (a bit awkward) to "Taxonomy" (as per convention in other taxon articles, and it's already...

HouseOfChange (talk) 21:31, 9 March 2026 (UTC). The original hook seems awkward to me. I suggest rewording as:     ALT0a: ... that Sam Jaffe brought "wine...

May 2019 (UTC) I'm feeling like the hooks could use some copyediting for awkward construction. "Person in a wheelchair" is just kind of long and clunky...

Would "head of state" work better? Maybe, but it makes the wording really awkward..."President" is not incorrect, because even if he was provisional, he...

2015 (UTC) Both ALTs are clearly superior to the original hook, which is awkward at best. I've struck the original. MANdARAX • XAЯAbИAM 02:25, 12 February...

request despite the short notice, but I think the date request hook has awkward wording. Suggest ALT2 ... that one year ago today the 2010 Christchurch...

be fine in my opinion, but the syntax "vote for himself by one vote" is awkward. Alt 3 is intended to give exactly the same meaning as Alt 2 but in clear...

put the word "title" near the beginning of the hook, otherwise it sounds awkward to me. Perhaps something like the following (with 186 characters): ALT2:...

"protesting against ongoing proposed voter restrictions" reads a little awkward to me. I suggest dropping the "against ongoing" or something like "...that...

increasingly powerful phones and tablets). The repetition of 'console' is also awkward. Nick-D (talk) 10:27, 8 June 2013 (UTC) The article is about a video game...

for the review. I changed some of the wording in the article to be less awkward and more politically correct. I also fixed the missing reference. Please...

time on the main page. There are punctuation and grammar issues, some awkward phrasing ("to be directed actor from Aurat, Harish.") and usage issues...

not use "works of Averroes" in this context, but with the picture it is awkward either way. Catrìona (talk) 14:15, 11 July 2018 (UTC) ALT1b:... that many...

was an off-Broadway production. I find the original hook unacceptably awkward, but I think that ALT1 is OK (and supported). I think it could be given...

and 3 are fine. Note: I have copyedited the article a little, to tidy up awkward language which was muddying the meaning of some sentences - but that copyedit...

I think rewording alt1 to include "refounding" or similar will be too awkward - Dumelow (talk) 05:52, 4 November 2021 (UTC) Approving ALT0. Ktin (talk)...

new GA of adequate length, well sourced and neutral. I found Alt0 to be awkward - my vote would be to use Alt1 or Alt2. If Alt1 is used, would it be appropriate...

has been done. Hook fact is verified to the cited source. The hook is awkward to read at present (I think partly because "the team" is unclear at the...

filming schedule of a Korean drama is so tight actors often have to sleep in awkward places and positions on set, for which the industry has its own invented...

I could of course add his name to the sentence, but it seems somewhat awkward to me. Munfarid1 (talk) 18:04, 5 July 2023 (UTC) QPQ ok. But if Mohamed...

(talk) 15:12, 3 October 2024 (UTC) I still think that phrasing is slightly awkward, but it's better and less ambiguous. PARAKANYAA (talk) 18:47, 3 October...

Encyclopedia of Alabama does not mention abolitionism. Another slightly awkward point about this hook is that the founders did not specifically have Parks...

detected. Sourcing is good. The double use of 'Perisan' in ALT1 is a little awkward. Perhaps combine the hooks, as in : ALT2: ... that Jerome Xavier learned...

genre (+ it's nicely short and implies for choir a cappella which would be awkward to add). ALT1: ... that Arvo Pärt (pictured) composed the motet The Deer's...

include a mention of the Berlin Wall but I think it ends up reading a little awkward. What do you think of my alt 2? Ryan Vesey Review me! 06:10, 17 June 2012...

accidentally sawed in half while it was being excavated? It reads a bit awkwardly at the moment. MeegsC (talk) 15:19, 17 April 2021 (UTC) Absolutely! Either...

(UTC) @Surtsicna: It's more or less a summary of the article. It would be awkward to have the sentence with the list of name in the body of the article though...

article is neutral and cites sources. Language in the article however is awkward and may need a copyedit to make it clear. Does anyone else want to improve...

you will want to check. However, I'm not sure about your hook; it is awkwardly phrased. Could you propose an alternate hook, possibly along the lines...

know. It's also prominent on the pic. - The naming St. Pauli Church is awkward (half German, half English) and not supported by a source (which is worse)...

article is need of a copyedit before this can be promoted. There are many awkward grammatical constructions throughout the article. In addition, the hook...

(talk) 15:24, 25 June 2014 (UTC) "The opening scene closes on a casket" is awkward, even if I was sure what it meant. I kind of like the free burial service...

March 2023 (UTC) Thanks for your review and kind words. It's a little awkward, given I write by default in British English(!), though I have recently...

point it's not important. I much prefer ALT1 and have reworded to be less awkward. Reference given (note 6) only says that activists have called for the...

Let's just go with ALT1 as written - I feel like the wording is a little awkward but I can't think of a better way to phrase it. GeneralNotability (talk)...

June 2019 (UTC) @Lee Vilenski: @BlueMoonset: the wording was slightly awkward in ALT1 - comma placement, for example, makes it look like he only lost...

issue is that the chapter title with the hook ("Infestations") sounds awkward to me, so try to think about an alternative ("Invasions"? "Population explosions"...

"Calculation" section, which I get lost in: "within-sign degree number" sounds awkward, and took a long time to figure out what you meant. "(which begins 270°...

recommend picking this, although the word "pre-candidate" is a little awkward and not explained in the body -- I take it this means they've announced...

Corachow (talk) 13:29, 8 July 2021 (UTC) Gerda Arendt, this hook reads a bit awkwardly in English; it needs a word or two added. Would "... that "Alle Menschen...

me, so I suggest that you don't change it. (2) I have copyedited some awkward prose: a minor edit which should not affect this DYK review. However please...

neutrally written, no close paraphrasing seen. QPQ done. The hook is a little awkwardly worded ("went on to become"), and I think there are far more interesting...

not sure what else to suggest. As any further changes would result in an awkward construct that would not represent natural language use. Guliolopez (talk)...

one thing: ZooBlazer, the last reference pointing to Game Informer is an awkward rewording of the author's conclusion. It doesn't make sense to say "Thunder's...

executed. About Alt1: the "which he attended" at the end sounds a little awkward to me, so I'm not against leaving it off. But I also wanted to emphasize...

who have never heard of blockchain? Source: “It was actually a really awkward visit… once I started asking people, ‘well, what do you think of blockchain...

April 2018 (UTC) Hi, I came by to promote ALT2, but the wording is a bit awkward. Could we write: ALT2a: ... that the UN Security Council has banned exports...

zealotry, on whomever's part. WRT to some of the other ALTs, "lies" is awkward -- I'd just say "is" or "are"; also, I don't see anything in the article...

(UTC) As I see it, the article would benefit from editing to fix some awkward wording and sentence structure, convert some passages/wording from vernacular...

November 2011 (UTC) You've fixed some of the problems I spotted, like awkward capitalization and spaces between punctuation marks and footnote numbers...

and the upcoming character appearance). Less fatally to DYK, but still awkward, are the incomplete formatting of the references and the disambiguation...

which no other pieces have been found for some 1400 years, but that's awkward. The hook is verified, as I said, so I think it's fine. Yoninah (talk)...

Sarens Soediro, a retired brigadier general") it becomes a bit clunky and awkward, while if we replace the name the context disappears (the hook is interesting...

Sources: as above plus Georgia Straight: "The title has put marketers in awkward situations (it's being called YPF in the U.K. and U.S.)." ALT2:... that...

Poeticbent (talk). Self nom at 16:13, 8 November 2012 (UTC) IMO, creatures is awkward and should be replaced by beings. Maria is not mentioned in [1]. Why is...

improvements, it is now" as the original construction reads slightly awkwardly and was missing a comma (which I inserted). Maybe the types of improvements...

young women, whom he affectionately dubbed the 'Hiroshima Maidens,' an awkward English translation of the Japanese name with which they had christened...

Mike Peel, thanks! I've made your first change. The second I find a bit awkward phrasing: the conman is offering to pave your drive, even if it's not an...

your review. I've had a go at rewording those two sentences, which are awkward becuase of the book titltes and organisation names but hopefully they are...

(talk) 07:31, 14 March 2021 (UTC) Easter's fine with me (being aware of my awkward timing, I was trying to suggest some semi-logical dates). "Allegedly" is...

Michael D. Turnbull: I was going to promote this, but the hook is too awkward sounding for my liking. Here's some suggested ALTs below: ALT2b: ... that...

Hungarian source in good faith. ALT2 : Supported by Engel. ALT3 : This hook is awkward because the link to the DYK article is buried in the middle. Also, the...

concerned about the use of idiomatic British expressions, but they may seem awkward to a North American audience. The Nairn and Pevsner citation is missing...

24 July 2016 (UTC) @Jujutsuan: @Vanamonde93: "examines an example" is awkwardly alliterative. Yoninah (talk) 00:05, 29 July 2016 (UTC) @Jujutsuan: @Yoninah:...

fudges it ok. Johnbod (talk) 03:20, 30 August 2016 (UTC) Main hook is awkward → speakers, free speech, spoke all in one sentence. Could be worded better...

construction "charter and fund ... advocated for and allowed" is kind of awkward, with the repetition of "and". This needs some better phrasing. -- RoySmith...

(expanded, well written, cited) & QPQ done. ALT0 is perhaps a little awkwardly worded and I'd leave Berlin Wall as "Berlin Wall", but I still prefer...

eligibility: Cited: Interesting: Other problems: - The hook reads rather awkwardly. It can condensed a bit by changing "set aside with the a conservation...

(UTC) The facts for ALT1 are supported but the phrasing seems a little awkward. How about ALT2: ... that Robyn Gigl, who has written a series of legal...

the MOS, and it's really the only option unless we want to get creative/awkward with phrasing ("died by suicide"? yuck). "Took his own life" is the current...

translations from the poetry ("attain enlightenment" is much clearer than the awkward "succeed in becoming a Buddha"). ALT3 is approved; ALT2 approved as backup...

investigate war crimes directly - which would be false. ALT1 sounds a little awkward - it sounds like maybe there's a word that accidentally got dropped. ALT2...

slightly different crop, because I thought the first one looked at little awkward in the article. GreenLipstickLesbian💌🧸 05:56, 28 April 2026 (UTC)...

May 2019 (UTC) Hi, I came by to promote this, but the grammar in ALT1 is awkward. The clause but the system collapsed before it was premiered at the Komische...

reference 3. In addition, that sentence, with the phrase "since the 1952's" is awkward. It's also not strictly correct, as the article in ref 3 indicated that...

of course abide by that. I hope that doesn't sound as if I'm being too awkward. Thanks. -- Trevj (talk) 20:23, 26 July 2012 (UTC) It's hard to know if...

example of Beaumont children disappearance, which like this one sounds less awkward when we're dealing with multiple persons. Daniel Case (talk) 23:53, 19...

think of a way to paraphrase the sentence without making the phrasing awkward because the idea itself is so brief. ALT1 might be more eye-catching because...

usage is not often encyclopedic and can usually be rewritten to avoid the awkward construction, unless part of a direct quotation. Because {{em}} is strictly...

20:05, 26 March 2012 (UTC) The reason the original may appear somewhat awkward is my desire to be both factually accurate and intriguing. It was meant...

browsers. Wraps the entire construction in the {{Nowrap}} template to prevent awkward line-breaking between the "+" and the name that follows it (because browsers...

members of the cast and crew"—plural "70 cast and crew" by itself feels awkward. These are the only minor things keeping it from a pass. The photo is excellent...

November 2018 (UTC) I tried to squeeze the original hook in there, if it is awkward you could flip the order of food and poison. The first image is better...

paraphrasing: Hook eligibility: Cited: Interesting: Other problems: - The hook is awkward - it can be read as if "all her songs" means all songs from her entire...

LaTeX mathematical expressions like variables, and is useful for limiting awkward wrapping points. It is more cumbersome to use for equations or other expressions...

cringe culture community originally intended it to foster empathy for awkward people, not to mock them? Source: Reviewed: Created by GregariousMadness (talk)...

information about its location and height. 'longest ridge route' also reads awkwardly. – Teratix ₵ 04:23, 28 April 2019 (UTC) @Teratix: The article is no longer...

 :) 97198 (talk) 15:19, 15 May 2020 (UTC) @Lee Vilenski: the hook is awkwardly worded. Do you mean the odds against him were 150 to 1? Would you mind...

ALT1a. I've struck ALT2 as the "attempted to reject" construction sounds awkward to me, and ALT1a flows much butter to my ear. -- RoySmith (talk) 19:25...

the Younger's protégés dueled each other in 1809? My wording is a little awkward but main idea is there. Duels were commonplace, so one simply happening...

close paraphrasing: Other problems: - The wording of the hook is a bit awkward and cumbersome. I feel like it somewhat detracts from an otherwise amusing...

(UTC) I don't love the photo. It's a crop from another, and it's just awkward. I tried to recrop, but it's not high enough res and doesn't have enough...

the Dutch to ban a political party. Perhaps "emblem pictured", somewhat awkwardly in the middle of an adjective construction, can be replaced by a longer...

for the purpose of explaining the language patterns (which is otherwise awkward when using rōmaji, since rōmaji is unable to discriminate kana). The optional...

14:33, 12 July 2021 (UTC) @Pamzeis: Saying "to perform alone" is a bit awkward to describe her doing a solo concert, I did a minor reword of the ALT above...

stuff the hook as literal text in the lead, but that will be stylistically awkward. EEng (talk) 21:05, 30 September 2013 (UTC) Full review needed. BlueMoonset...

Taylor Swift (pictured)". If we want to keep the picture, it reads a little awkward as "Taylor Swift (pictured)'s". For the source, could we change it to The...

quote attributed to Frizzell in the Life and Education section reads awkwardly due to use of "I" in the quote... I'll actually edit that one myself....

running solo vs as a rabbit, but you are free to remove it if you think it's awkward). --Habst (talk) 10:05, 9 April 2024 (UTC) I like the contrast created...

BeanieFan11: Seems like this hook may be stuck because the wording is awkward. Could we try something like: ALT0a: ... that the first song played on...

and "assistant for the Press Representative of the Panama Canal" feels awkward. Can that one stay? valereee (talk) 16:03, 24 January 2019 (UTC) @Valereee:...

fragments like "With them taking part in demonstrations last year." / awkward phrases such as "humiliating a flag" / WP:MOS violations throughout. WP:DATED...

review alt2 (which I've moved for you), but I think that it ends rather awkwardly and the original phrasing works fine. Kingsif (talk) 00:43, 26 May 2020...

European Open". Both hooks need a little tweaking: Wording of the original is awkward: something like this may be better: ...that Neil Robertson won the 2020...

Article well sourced, long and new enough. QPQ pending. The hook is sort of awkwardly worded though, how about: ALT1: ... that Indonesian politician Iskandar...

interpreting at a televised press conference but it was just so long and awkward; maybe this would work for the quirky? Hm, and the DYK helper is insisting...

(pictured)? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:03, 2 May 2014 (UTC) Sorry to be awkward, the article is coming along well, but there is still much unreferenced...

all time". I've fixed the article in both places. The hook also seemed awkwardly redundant, so I struck it, and propose the following: ALT1: ... that George...

update. Take care that neither the "before" nor "after" text displays with awkward grammar. Unless the hour= is set, statements will be switched on the date...

homeless shelter in Manhattan?" because "his Nigerian refugee family" reads awkwardly. The Squirrel Conspiracy (talk) 07:51, 2 April 2020 (UTC) @The Squirrel...

WP:Newspapers.com/Approved). Maybe rename the "Facts" section "Background" Awkward transition, consider revising: "Regarding judicial intervention into a...

follow teh rulez. I wonder about "pictured" if we mention depictions, seems awkward. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:00, 23 October 2014 (UTC) Thanks for the review...

no longer extant," dropped between two past tense events, reads rather awkwardly, as it breaks the chronological flow. Also, the Church website seems to...

18:14, 1 August 2012 (UTC) Expansion etc. is OK. But the hook is a bit awkward ("meet full criteria" sounds odd to me, but maybe that's just me)--I wonder...

many activities, but it proved too difficult without making the wording awkward. Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 21:02, 25 March 2019 (UTC) Thanks for the offer...

they weren't practical - they broke down too often etc.); hook is a bit awkwardly worded but I can't think of any improvements that preserve the meaning;...

the author's apparent expertise in the subject I'll accept. Hook reads awkwardly though. I'd suggest modifying it to read "... that during World War II...

don't use it that often. Is the bad grammar referring specifically to awkward grammar? Which sources are not reliable? As I said above, VidanaliK, sources...

update. Take care that neither the "before" nor "after" text displays with awkward grammar. Unless the hour= is set, statements will be switched on the date...

described by the music, to my understanding, - "is the one to whom" sounds awkward. Dedicatee appears 555 times when I use the search function. We could have...

is two things combined, but to use the full long name all the time is awkward. There are sources enough saying that the combined thing has one access...

July 2022 (UTC) @Gerda Arendt: I'm concerned that the hook phrasing is awkward. I'm suggesting an ALT below that removes some words and rearranges the...

mentioned. The wording of ALT0 needs a bit of work too, since it flows awkwardly. Perhaps "... that some locked exit gates at Fifth Avenue/53rd Street...

other value), to get rid of the slight letter spacing, which can look awkward on long passages of input. Examples: {{kbd|71077345}}: "Entering 71077345...

Gardens). I have reworded the sentence with the Pulteney link to avoid the awkward link to a DAB page. The use of the term "canal boats" is neutral and does...

(1928–1930)" is missing a closing parenthesis, though as the phrase seems awkwardly written and out of place compared to the rest of the article, it could...

B minor and structured it in four parts?" The current link looks a bit awkward. Also I'm not even sure this article shouldn't be merged with the article...

00:30, 2 December 2020 (UTC). Comment: "studied abroad in England" is awkward; use the more concise "studied in England" instead. Mindmatrix 00:45, 2...

and it still needs to be rewritten. Currently, the language is simply too awkward to let this article pass.—♦♦ AMBER(ЯʘCK) 20:24, 17 April 2013 (UTC)...

for verifiability. Actually originally posted 10/18, Text is somewhat awkwardly presented, but correctDjflem (talk) 08:08, 19 October 2012 (UTC) I'll...

also adjacent to the "pictured" parenthesis, so graphically perhaps a tad awkward. Re: Image, I don't object to using it. As it is readable and interesting...

Although this isn't strictly a requirement, some copyediting to clean up awkward grammar/phrasing in the article before it appears on the front page would...

sending her students to postgraduate in the sorbonne and was awarded..." is awkward and too close to the source, so needs reworking. Mary Mark Ockerbloom (talk)...

was insistent about his preferred cut, even as the situation grew real awkward." Other sources refer to him as "Ken" (The Nikkei) or "Ghib" or "Ghibli"...

October 2018 (UTC) Thank you for improving, - how about dropping the year, awkward after the "pictured"? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:53, 25 October 2018 (UTC)...

copyvio or close paraphrasing; neutral; QPQ done. The hooks are a little awkwardly phrased, though - it wasn't the case itself that associated him with the...

2012 (UTC) OK, thanks for the history lesson. I think the hook is a bit awkwardly worded. I would propose the alt "... that in Armenia, wrestling is one...

and more interesting. I'll work on the lead today and check the text for awkward phrasing, but I'll be grateful if you'll also copyedit it, as I think that...

two paragraphs beginning with During the long bus ride, the Queen have awkward space to the right in my browser. You need to play with the image layout...

insufficient. BTW, I had to inform you about the DYK problem. It is not awkward as you commented on your user talk page. --CeeGee 21:47, 23 February 2014...

the previously introduced term "detectorist" is used where it would be awkward to repeat the longwinded "metal-detector user") Washington Post : "While...

needs a copyedit; it's nothing personal, it's just that it comes across as awkward to me (as a native English speaker). Having looked at the sourcing, though...

accomplishments as a football player. Similarly, the article is written a little awkwardly. For example, the sentence "In the 2011–12 season, she played one match...

for the purpose of explaining the language patterns (which is otherwise awkward when using rōmaji, since rōmaji is unable to discriminate kana). The optional...

Comment: Please feel free to make changes to the alt; Its wording seems a bit awkward to me Created by AmateurHi$torian (talk). Number of QPQs required: 0. Nominator...

references to the length of every other US route in the state, so it would be awkward and distract from the article. As for the discrepancy, it looks like the...

being cited, and it is interesting, but I feel that it's phrased a little awkwardly (at least to my ear). I'd suggest a slight rewording, along the lines...

was a mix of Vincent Herbert, Akon and Jimmy Iovine. ALT1 sounds very awkward, and is not interesting at all. The song wasn't originally hers, she later...

and the (pictured), as specified at WP:DYKHOOK. The phrasing is a little awkward and could be improved, but it is within the rules. John P. Sadowski (NIOSH)...

no images; and QPQ fulfilled. Original hook is spicy, although I feel awkward just repeating someone else's quote about the subject; ALT1 is bland but...

3 ALTs are attempts to reword the same hook. I think ALT1 sounds a bit awkward Created by AmateurHi$torian (talk). Number of QPQs required: 2. DYK is...

don't see why this is confusing or why you'd want the hook to read more awkwardly by adding the words "probably slightly over ~" when it's already accurate...

off-line book sources which are accepted in good faith. The first hook is awkwardly phrased. The alt 1 and alt 2 hooks look fine. The image is from Commons...

hits/clicks from a general audience, rather than the replacement, with the wing awkwardly covering the face. —Gaff ταλκ 20:57, 25 November 2014 (UTC) Fair enough...

I think ALT1 is the most interesting hook, but the phrasing is a bit awkward and probably hews too close to the source you've given. Might I suggest:...

reviewed. BlueMoonset (talk) 14:11, 26 July 2013 (UTC) The ALT1 hook is awkwardly worded. As there is a pending move for both the event/foundation and the...

quote; it is very specific language. AGF on German sources. This hook is awkwardly worded mostly because there's so much going on here. In particular, the...

interesting to me. Working the marriage into ALT4 is probably a little awkward. The Nureyev fact is perfectly fine, but probably not very interesting...

(25,176 characters "readable prose size"), fully referenced. Main hook awkwardly-worded and ambiguous, so ALTs preferred, verified by online source; ALT1...

to be the father of Sioux City's Jewish community?" - it looks kind of awkward as is, normally there would be an offsetting comma after Iowa per MOS:GEOCOMMA...

proposed New Deal. Reviewed: Comment: the first one's punctuation is so awkward I was thinking of having one saying something along the lines of "... that...

(UTC) Apologies for not following up on this one sooner. Both alts are awkward in my opinion and inaccurate, I don't think either are acceptable. The...

good summary of that statement. I thought that the wording might be a bit awkward, but English is a weird language, and I just chalked it up to stylistic...

reentry [...]. Thus, in Richard II, John of Gaunt makes an abrupt and awkward departure purely to be able to take part in a vital scene that follows...

from here. (I looked, because the use of the word "gauche" felt...well...awkward). I am too inexperienced reviewing DYK to bend any rules and make the final...

しまって…。思い通りのお芝居ができなかったので、くやしい思いをしました。. I feel that the wording might be awkward, so if you have any suggestions on how to rephrase, that would be helpful...

still find some of the present/future verb tenses in the last paragraph awkward ("20,000 troops stationed[...]" vs. "The toxins will eventually[...]")...

government source with appropriate free licence. I find ALT1 slightly awkward, so I've added ALT2 as an alternative. Mindmatrix 23:19, 17 March 2014...

usage is not often encyclopedic and can usually be rewritten to avoid the awkward construction, unless part of a direct quotation. Because {{em}} is strictly...

output of {{make cite IUCN}} (wikilinks etc) before saving. One, sort of awkward, way to accomplish that is to open another browser window and open a sandbox...

The source is this. Feel free to reword the hooks if the wording sounds awkward. -AmateurHi$torian (talk) 20:31, 30 November 2025 (UTC) Disgusting. I love...

appropriate. In ALT1 placement of "during the Second World War," is a little awkward and it's easy to assume both duties were during WWII, one after the other...

length, neutrality, copyvio and plagiarism all OK. Alt5a is fine, if a bit awkward. Only one question: how do we know that picture is of brogues by Nunn Bush...

(UTC) Approving ALT3. Striking ALTs 1 and 2 as I find the wording to be awkward. New enough as 5x expansion, long enough. Wording of article is neutral...

book (talk) 10:08, 1 February 2020 (UTC) Ah, just realised - it would be awkward to have two hooks involving the same article, even if a different picture...

you could reword that bit, rather than the hook, to make it sound less awkward/ambiguous. Kingoflettuce (talk) 17:34, 12 February 2022 (UTC) How can I...

Created by Piotrus (talk). Self nominated at 09:09, 21 April 2014 (UTC). Awkward hook IMO. Should be more succinctly. -- P 1 9 9  ✉ 13:59, 24 April 2014...

browsers. Wraps two constructions in the {{Nowrap}} template to prevent awkward line-breaking between the "×" and the epithet it should be "stuck" to (because...

Narutolovehinata5 tccsdnew 02:20, 22 February 2018 (UTC) They both seem to be awkwardly-worded ("that when she was young"?). I actually had a better idea; ALT3:...

has been copied from Palestinian Christians. Two, there are some really awkward or simply ungrammatical sentences. Such emigration decisions of often pursuit...

rather uninteresting; ALT1 is fine though. However, the wording is rather awkward and I think it could be reworded. The link is also a bit of a WP:EGG, as...

properly attributed quotations and a few short, simple phrases that would be awkward to rephrase. I think the copyright side of this is good now. Time to move...

article also requires some clean up. Uses of however, despite etc., seem awkward and essay'ish' to me. EagerToddler39 (talk) 01:22, 7 January 2014 (UTC)...

May 2022 (UTC) Allegedly raped, no, she was raped. Allegedly two seems awkward. Raped by a well-respected older man (allegedly two) is worse. valereee...

a paucity of sources to work with, but it nevertheless seems a little awkward to have it consist almost entirely of "he got divorced a million times...

something like this at the start of that section, though to me it reads a bit awkward (especially Garradd's novae since I can only find individual primary references...

disagreement "creates" and "was performed", which are different tenses and read awkwardly. Could you reword the hook, maybe flipping the order and tightening it...

rewording, should just be proper names and common phrases now that would be awkward to reword - Dumelow (talk) 20:45, 7 September 2023 (UTC) Looks good to...

December 2025 (UTC). Review as follows: Article is well written, with some awkward sentences that could be attributed to linguistic differences during the...