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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 01:06, 1 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one up Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 01:06, 1 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

• Fact tag in the infobox needs addressing
  • Done. Assuming "Fact tag" meant the "[citation needed]" next to Sega AM8, I couldn't find any sources that indicated that they played any role in developing the game, so it was removed. Disney Interactive Studios remains the sole developer of the game.
• Per WP:LEAD, this article should not have a three-paragraph lead as it only has 6503 characters
  • Done. Two paragraphs should be good.
• For that matter, too much of the lead is not mentioned in the article's body, with "Much of the game is patterned after the first three Indiana Jones films." and the entire second paragraph not being mentioned anywhere else. Please rectify
  • Done. I replaced the sentence that referenced Indiana Jones with a mention of the Illusion series (which *is* mentioned later). The entire second paragraph was re-written and moved down to become the short development section - I hope that's okay, since (as far as I can tell) there's not a whole lot of sources that can be used to talk about the development of the game.
• A screenshot of the title screen is not warranted per WP:NFCC#8
  • Done. I removed it.
• A short development section should be added. Even if there's nothing out there, you can still briefly describe the studios who developed it.
  • Done. See my response to your 3rd bullet point above.
• "the graphics are excellent, but the game is easy to complete." Needs a source
  • Done. I added the same ref that was used for MegaTech magazine's review score (the quote is from the magazine).
• The reception section is just a summary of Buchanan and Butt's reviews. There should be more reviews added if you can find them
  • Done, kinda. I re-wrote the Reception section to focus on the game's praise first, followed by its criticisms. The second paragraph (the game's criticisms) is still mostly a summary of Buchanan and Butt's reviews (those are the most prolific reviews I could find), though I did find a short GameTrailers review that I included in there. I think it's definitely a better Reception section than before as far as flow is concerned.

Overall I think this a promising GA nominee and will give you a week to address these points. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 17:40, 1 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I did my best to address your points. Please let me know what you think! — SolarStarSpire (talk) 00:30, 7 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]